2023年6月大学英语四、六级作文试题评析（一）

四        级

Directions： Suppose your university is conducting a survey to collect students’ opinions of online classes. You are to write a response to the survey about their advantages and disadvantages， and what improvements can be made. You will have 30 minutes for the task. You should write at least 120 words but no more than 180 words.

这道大学英语四级作文试题属于分析现象型作文。此类型题目的特点是提出一个社会现象或问题，要求考生分析。本题要求考生分析线上课的优缺点并提出改进方法。就像我们拍照需要聚焦一样，写作文也需要突出重点，不能眉毛胡子一把抓。就本文而言，我们宜把网课的优缺点作为本文论述的重点。至于如何改进网课，我们只需在结尾段中简略地提一条建议即可。

这篇作文可以写三段。

第一段先指出自从新冠暴发以来，全国各地的学校和大学都给学生开设了线上课。然后指出凡事都有利有弊，线上课也有其优点和缺点。这样我们就引出了本文所讨论的话题。

第二段分析线上课的优点和缺点。线上课的优点和缺点有很多，我们可以择其要者论述。比如，我们可以先指出线上课最显著的优点是方便。然后提供一些细节作为支撑：学生们可以穿着拖鞋、品着一杯茶，在自己舒适的家里上课。他们只需要互联网连接和一台电脑。接着我们再指出线上课的缺点。虽然线上课对一些学生效果非常好，但并不适合每个人，尤其是那些不自律和缺乏学习动力的学生，因为他们很容易被电子游戏或其他线上娱乐分心。

本文可以用建议法结尾，即第三段针对线上课的缺点提出改进建议。我们先指出线上课能够代替在实体教室里进行的传统学习，尤其是在危机时期。然后建议学校开发一些工具，以密切关注学生在虚拟教室里的行为。

下面请看参考范文：

Since the outbreak of COVID-19， schools and universities across the country have offered online classes to their students. This is a great boon to millions of students confined to their home during the pandemic. But just as a coin has two sides， online classes have their advantages and disadvantages.

The most significant advantage of online classes is convenience. Students can take classes in the comfort of their own home， wearing slippers and sipping a cup of tea. All they need is an internet connection and a computer. But online classes are not without drawbacks. While remote learning works incredibly well for some students， it is not for everyone， especially those unself-disciplined or unmotivated students， who are easily distracted by video games or other online entertainment.

Online classes are a great substitute for traditional learning in the physical classroom， especially in times of crisis. For maximum effect， schools and universities are advised to develop tools to ensure that students’ actions are closely monitored in the virtual classroom. （166 words）

语言亮点借鉴：

1. This is a great boon to millions of students confined to their home during the pandemic. 这给疫情期间被困在家里的千百万学生带来巨大便利。boon 给生活带来方便的事物。

2. Students can take classes in the comfort of their own home， wearing slippers and sipping a cup of tea. 学生们可以穿着拖鞋、品着一杯茶，在自己舒适的家里上课。in the comfort of 在舒适的……之中。

3. But online classes are not without drawbacks. 但是线上课并非没有缺点。本句是一个过渡句，其作用是使论述从优点丝滑地转到缺点。

4. While remote learning works incredibly well for some students， it is not for everyone， especially those unself-disciplined or unmotivated students， who are easily distracted by video games or other online entertainment. 虽然远程学习对一些学生效果极好，但它并不适合每个人，尤其是那些不自律或者没有学习动力的学生，因为他们很容易被电子游戏或其他在线娱乐分心。sth is not for sb 某事物不适合某人。

六        级

Directions： For this part， you are allowed 30 minutes to write an essay that begins with the sentence “It is widely accepted that an important goal of education is to help students learn how to learn.” You can make comments， cite examples or use your personal experiences to develop your essay. You should write at least 150 words but no more than 200 words.

这道大学英语六级作文试题属于阐释观点型。此类型题目的特点是提出一个观点，请考生论证这个观点的正确性。这道题要求考生论证的观点是，教育的一个重要目标是帮助学生学会如何学习。我们在审题时要善于简化题目，透过复杂的表述看到题目的本质。所谓帮助学生学会如何学习，其实就是培养学生的学习能力。因此这道题其实是要求考生论证培养学生学习能力的重要性。我们抓住了这个本质，写作思路就会清晰起来：从分析学习能力对学生重要作用的角度展开论证。

本文可以写三段。

第一段先提出论点：教育的一个重要目标是帮助学生学会如何学习，然后引用上海大学的一项研究佐证这个观点。此为破题。

第二段论证为什么教育的一个重要目标是帮助学生学会如何学习，即论证培养学生学习能力的重要性。我们不妨从学习能力有助于学生取得事业成功的角度展开论证。由于职场变化迅速，现在的毕业生不能再像过去那样找到一份工作就能一生持有。最有能力学习新技能的人会如鱼得水，而那些没有学习能力的人会因缺乏竞争力而被替代。因此，学习新技能的能力可以帮助学生保持领先，甚至开启新机遇的大门。

本文可以用建议法结尾。第三段先总结上文，指出在这个不断变化的世界上，学习新事物的能力使学生具备事业成功所需的知识和技能。最后水到渠成地建议学校更加重视提高学生的自主学习能力。

下面请看参考范文：

It is widely accepted that an important goal of education is to help students learn how to learn. A recent Shanghai University study found that 84.2% of the educators polled think that college students should graduate with the skill to learn for the rest of their lives.

Developing college students’ learning ability is the best way to help them succeed in their future career. With the workplace changing rapidly， it’s no longer the case that a graduate finds a job and keeps it all his life. Workers who are best able to learn new skills are most likely to survive and thrive， but those who aren’t will stop being competitive and get replaced. It stands to reason that the ability to learn new skills helps students stay on top and even opens the door to new opportunities.

The ability to learn new things will equip students with the knowledge and skills they need to succeed in their career in the constantly changing world. So schools and universities should attach more importance to improving students’ ability to learn on their own. （180 words）

语言亮点借鉴：

1. With the workplace changing rapidly， it’s no longer the case that a graduate finds a job and keeps it all his life. 由于职场变化迅速，现在的毕业生不能再像过去那样找到一份工作就能一生持有。It’s no longer the case that… 不再像以前那样……。

2. Workers who are best able to learn new skills are most likely to survive and thrive， but those who aren’t will stop being competitive and get replaced. 最有能力学习新技能的人最有可能立于不败之地，而那些没有能力学习新技能的人会因不再具有竞争力而被替代。survive and thrive 生存和发展。

3. It stands to reason that the ability to learn new skills helps students stay on top and even opens the door to new opportunities. 显然，学习新技能的能力可以帮助学生保持领先，甚至开启新机遇的大门。It stands to reason that… 显而易见，……。stay on top 保持领先。

4. So schools and universities should attach more importance to improving students’ ability to learn on their own. 所以学校应当更加重视提高学生的自主学习能力。attach importance to 重视。