Wang Ming's Progress
作者： 任新超本期点评名师
任新超男，湖北省襄阳市东津新区金源中学优秀教师，从事教育工作多年；在省级刊物上发表过若干篇论文；曾在襄阳广播电视台英语新闻栏目担任播音员；曾获得湖北省微课比赛三等奖、襄阳市微课一等奖、襄阳市教学能手、襄阳市青教赛三等奖、公开课教学竞赛一等奖等荣誉称号；指导的学生在各类竞赛中取得了出色成绩，多人获得省级奖和地市级奖。
Wang Ming is my classmate. He has made great progress this term.
In the past， he used to fight with others. But now he is used to makingfriends with his classmates. He used to spend much time play computer games.However， he takes an active part in all activities now. He often ate junk foodbefore and he seldom went out for a walk. But now he has good habits. Such as，he always eats vegetables and fresh fruit， and he goes for walk every day. Heused to eat food and sleep in class， so he used to fail his exams. But now helistens to the teacher carefully and always finishes the homework well in time.
Wang Ming has changed a lot because his hard work. I hope that he will be better and better in the future.
湖北省襄阳市东津新区金源中学 周芷伊
优点：
作者通过对比王明过去和现在的行为，清晰地展示了王明的变化。全文结构清晰、语言流畅，是一篇不错的学生习作。
①play 改成playing。spend time doing sth.意为“花时间做某事”。
② Such as 改成For example。举例时such as 接名词或名词短语，for example 接句子。
③because 改成because of。表原因时because of 接名词或名词短语，because 接句子。
评分：
按中考英语作文满分15 分的评分标准，本文修改前可得13分。