The Most Important Person

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陈传光男，江苏省连云港市罗阳中学高级教师、连云港市新333工程教学标兵、连云港市优秀教育园丁，从事教育教学工作多年；曾获英语专业技能大赛市一等奖及班主任基本功大赛市一等奖；有多篇论文在各核心和主流期刊上发表。

The Most Important Person

Hi， everyone. My name is David. In my life， I think， the most important personis my mom. My mom is forty years old. She is on淤medium height. She has longblack hair. My mom is a teacher in a middle school. She works very hard and herstudents like her very much. She is busy but she spends much time take于care ofme. She too盂helps me with my schoolwork. When I have problems， she will be thefirst one to help. I want to say thanks to her and I love her. My mom is the mostimportant person in my life.

江苏省连云港市罗阳中学 殷荣章

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优点：本文介绍了“我”生活中最重要的人———妈妈。文中描述了妈妈的年龄、身高和工作等方面情况，讲述了妈妈对“我”的爱和付出，表达了“我”对妈妈的爱。全篇感情真挚，行文连贯，是一篇合格的学生习作。

需要修改的地方：①on 改为of。be of medium height 是固定用法，意为“中等身高”。

②take 改为taking。spend 搭配介词with，再加上动词-ing 表示“花时间做某事”。

③too 改为also。句中表示“也……”用also。

评分：按江苏省连云港市中考英语作文满分25分的评分标准，本文修改前可得23分。