I Like Sports
Hi, everyone! Believe it or not, I like sports very much. I have threebasketballs. I play basketball every day. After class, I always play basketball and淤my classmates. I think it’s relaxing and easy for me. I also have four footballs.And于I don’t play football. I only watch it on TV. It’s difficult. I don’t have avolleyball. I think it’s boring. I like playing table tennis best, because tabletennis is our national game. Sports are good to盂us. It is interesting to play sportsevery day.
优点:
这是一篇谈论体育用品及体育运动的短文。小作者先是概述自己非常喜欢运动,接着再具体展开介绍拥有的运动物品及相关观点,最后总结全文,呼应开头。此外,本文灵活运用了多个句式,增加了不少亮点。总之,本文是一篇成功的学生习作。
需要修改的地方院
①and 改为with。表“和某人打篮球”用介词with。
②And 改为But。上下文表示转折关系要用But。
③to 改为for。be good for 是固定短语,意为“对……有好处”。
评分院
按中考英语作文满分20 的评分标准,本文修改前可得18 分。
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