My Happy Junior School Life

My happy junior school life made me grow up and made me know whatfriendship is， what love is and what happiness is.

I still remember one afternoon last winter. Because a bad cold， I had to beabsent from my classes and was in the hospital于for two weeks. I was so sad andworried about my study that I was in no mood to eat. However， to my surprised，my classmates took turns to come to see me. They cheered me up and helped mewith my study till I came back to school. Under the help of my classmates， Ibecame healthy quickly. More luckily， I didn’t fall behind others in study.

Because of friendship and love， I feel I have been the happiest boy in the pasttwo years. I’m lucky that I have a happy junior school life.

河北省阜城县第四中学 刘立海

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张超 男，河北省衡水市阜城县第四中学高级英语教师、县骨干教师、市优秀英语教师，从事英语教育教学工作30 多年；多年来，在省级以上报刊发表文章数百篇，并有多篇文章获奖；曾参与多本教辅资料的编写工作；曾荣获“中央教育科学研究所全国基础教育科研先进个人”荣誉称号；曾多次辅导多名学生在市、省和国家级英语竞赛中获奖。

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本文小作者构思巧妙，开篇以三个并列从句夺人眼球。多种短语及句型的恰当使用，使文章亮点多多。

需要修改的地方：

①Because 改为Because of。because of 是介词短语，后接名词、代词、动名词等。

②in the hospital 改为in hospital。in the hospital 意为“在医院里”，而inhospital 意为“生病住院”。

③surprised 改为surprise。to one’s surprise 是固定搭配，意为“令人惊奇的是”。

④Under 改为With。with the help of sb.是固定短语，意为“在某人的帮助下”。

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按中考英语作文满分20 分的评分标准，本文修改前可得18 分。