My Friend's School Life
Liu Mingshan is my good friend. She is a middle school student. She hasinteresting school life. She goes to school at 6:00 a.m. Her classes finish at6:00 p.m. She has much classes. They are Chinese, math, English, science,music, art and P.E. Her favorite subject is English. She thinks it is easy. Herfavorite teacher is Ms. Yang. She is her English teacher. She likes English partybecause it is fun. I think she has a great time in school.
湖北省襄阳市东津新区金源中学 张家宝
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任新超 男,湖北省襄阳市东津新区金源中学优秀教师,从事教育工作9 年,在省级刊物上发表过若干篇文章,曾在襄阳广播电视台英语新闻栏目担任播音员,获得湖北省微课比赛三等奖、襄阳市微课一等奖、襄阳市教学能手、襄阳市青教赛三等奖、公开课教学竞赛一等奖等荣誉称号。此外,指导学生在各类竞赛中取得了出色成绩,多人获得省级奖和地市级奖。
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这是一篇介绍“我”朋友的学校生活的小短文。作者对朋友的姓名、身份、学校、课程安排和学习等情况进行充分介绍。全文思路清晰、语法正确、语言流畅、衔接自然,是一篇合格的学生习作。
需要修改的地方:
①interesting school life 前面加an。名词前缺少冠词修饰,且interesting 首字母为元音音素,冠词应用an。
②much 改为many。much 通常用于修饰不可数名词,而many 用于修饰可数名词classes。
③in school 改为at school 或in the school。符合习惯用法。
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按中考英语作文满分15 分的评分标准,本文修改前可得13 分。