立足文本解读，实现语言协同

【问题导读】

读后续写作为高考英语中的一种新题型，将语言的输入和输出紧密结合在一起。它要求续写内容与原文保持逻辑衔接上的合理性和语言风格上的一致性。因此，续写时除了要考虑故事的主题思想和逻辑关系之外，还需要高度关注续写内容和原文的语言风格，确保续写内容在语言风格上与原文保持一致。考生的续写有时会存在与原文割裂的情况，这是因为考生不注意原文用词和句子的风格，随心所欲，从而导致续写内容和原文语言风格偏离，不能很好地与原文保持语言风格的协同。为避免这种情况，考生需要在续写前充分地解读原文，从叙事风格、词汇、句式、表现手法、修辞手法等着眼，对原文的语言特点进行分析。续写的段落只有尽可能多维度地模仿、体现这些语言特点，才能输出与原文高度协同、浑然一体的佳作。

【名师导学】

读后续写任务中存在协同效应，该效应主要来自理解和产出的紧密结合。读后续写中的语言协同是指在续写中运用原文中的词表达自己思想的语言现象。因此我们在续写过程中，应当通过不断参照和回顾原文，自觉或不自觉地模仿和运用其中的一些表达，扫清表达障碍，强化续写语言与原文语言的协同。

在续写过程中，应当立足文本解读，在理解文章主旨和思想的基础上，注重对原文语言风格的分析与模仿，高度关注续写内容和原文的语言风格。这样，续写内容与原文的融合度才会更高，协同作用也才会更大。

【案例导引】

阅读下面短文，准确地把握住原文的基本情节走向和语言风格，在保持整体一致的前提下续写原文，使之构成一个完整的故事。

It took place in a teachers family. One day， Ben was playing basketball in the livingroom after school， when he accidentally threw the ball at a vase sitting on the shelf. Thevase dropped to the floor and a large piece broke off. What made Ben more upset was thatthe vase was not a common decoration but an antique， which was handed down throughgenerations from the 18th century. It was also his mothers favourite possession. To coverhis terrible action， the terrified boy glued the pieces together hastily and put the vase backto its place.

As the mother herself dusted the vase every day， she naturally noticed the cracks （裂纹） that evening. To her surprise， the repair work was actually very good. At dinner time，she asked her boy if he broke the vase. Fearing punishment， the suddenly inspired boy saidthat a neighbours cat jumped in from the window and he couldnt drive it away no matterhow hard he tried. It raced around the living room and finally knocked the vase off its shelf.His mother was quite clear that her son was lying， for all the windows were closed beforeshe left for work each morning and opened after she returned. However， in the face of hersons nervous eyes and the suspicious looks of the other family members， Bens mother remainedcalm. She realized she shouldnt just simply blame and punish her son for lying.She came up with another idea.

Before going to bed， the boy found a note from his mother in his room， asking him togo to the study at once. The boy thought he would be punished but， as he had already lied，he was determined to deny everything to the end， no matter how angry his mum became.

In the study， calmly bathed in the light， his mothers face showed no sign of anger. Onseeing her son push open the door and cautiously enter， she took a chocolate box out of adrawer and gave him one.

注意：续写词数应为150左右。

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The mother said，“ This chocolate is a reward for your imagination： a window⁃openingcat！

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Now with some chocolates in hand， the boys bad attitude disappeared.

文本解读

一、原文分析

二、原文主题

本文的主题语境为人与自我。本不小心打碎了妈妈心爱的花瓶，他害怕受到惩罚，便跟妈妈撒谎说是一只猫打碎的。妈妈虽然看穿了他的谎言，但为了保护孩子的自尊心，决定把他叫到书房用巧妙的方式进行教育。故事的主题是“诚实不说谎，敢于直面自己的错误”。

三、原文脉络

四、细品原文，找出语言协同点

1. 原文中关于本和他妈妈的描写

五、基于语言协同，研读首句构思情节发展

根据该故事的情节发展脉络，我们可以分析一下故事的情节走向。

故事的开端：本不小心打碎了妈妈心爱的祖传花瓶，为了掩盖自己犯的错，他急忙把花瓶的碎片粘回去并把花瓶放回了原处。

故事的发展：本的妈妈发现了花瓶上的裂纹，便问本是不是他打碎的。

问题的出现：由于担心受到惩罚，本便撒谎，说是一只猫打碎了花瓶。

问题的解决：本的妈妈在他的房间留下了纸条，让他立马去书房一趟。

结合续写段落所给出的首句可以推测出故事的结局：通过和妈妈谈心，本逐渐认识到了自己的错误并勇敢地向妈妈承认是自己打碎了花瓶。

续写第一段展开语言和动作描写细节时，可以结合原文语言协同点尝试回答以下问题：

（1）How did Ben feel upon hearing his mothers words？ Nervous？ Surprised？ Embarrassed？

（2）What should we write in paragraph 1 to show Bens“ bad attitude” mentioned inparagraph 2？

（3）Why did Ben have some chocolates in his hand in paragraph 2？ What other rewardsmight be mentioned in paragraph 1？

根据以上问题和给出的段首句内容——“这块巧克力糖是对你想象力的奖励：一只会开窗的猫！”，续写第一段的具体情节可以这样安排：本一开始仍然试图撒谎，到后来一点点卸下防备。妈妈找了几个理由来奖励本巧克力糖，一步步戳穿他的谎言但又巧妙地维护了孩子的自尊，让他放下恐惧。具体情节的设计应该以妈妈的奖励理由和孩子的内心活动变化为主。

续写第二段展开语言和动作描写细节时，可以结合原文语言协同点尝试回答以下问题：

（1）How did Ben feel now？ Ashamed？ Regretful？

（2）How would Ben tell his mother the truth？

（3）What was the mothers reaction to the truth？

（4）How can we design the ending to teach the readers a lesson？

根据以上问题和给出的段首句内容——“手里拿着一些巧克力糖，男孩的糟糕态度消失了。”，续写第二段的具体情节可以这样安排：本逐渐认识到了自己的错误并勇敢地向妈妈承认是自己打碎了花瓶。然后在续写内容的最后升华文章的主题。

参考范文

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The mother said，“ This chocolate is a reward for your imagination： a window⁃openingcat！” What made Ben quite surprised was the humorous but intelligent remarks， whichdestroyed his lies so easily. A mixed feeling of embarrassment， shame and fear crowded inon him， but he still muttered，“ But you forget to close the window！” Instead of arguing withhim， the mother took out another chocolate and said calmly，“ The second chocolate is givenfor your effort to repair the vase！ The cracks and the glue will always remind me of yourcare for me！” Hearing this， the boys face flushed， too awkward to utter a word， which wasinterrupted by his mothers remarks，“ And the third one is for your courage to face theproblem， though its a little delayed！” She then handed the chocolate gently to him.