角色体验,让想象更合理
作者: 彭文国【问题导读】
读后续写的材料一般都是故事性很强的记叙文,其中贯穿始终的是主要人物角色的心理和情感发展。要想写出符合文章故事发展,且与原文逻辑一致、语言色彩一致的优质续写,就必须要使故事中的主要人物角色设计合理,且增加适当的心理和情感描写。那么,如何从人物角色的角度去设计故事,让故事设计更合理呢?
【名师导学】
1. 角色体验是文章故事发展的关键。我们在理解原文故事和续写故事的时候,要站在主要角色的立场上来感受情景,设计场景、故事发展的走向和结果。如下文的“案例导引”,我们要从史蒂文的角度去考虑他的情感体验。续写要重点关注他从孤僻、自我否定、拒绝发展到积极融入群体、努力融入课堂的转变过程以及最后他对学校和老师的情感体验。
2. 要从主要角色的视角去设计故事情节,从而表达文章的主旨和积极思想。原文中,由于罗老师的充满爱和期望的倾情、合理的教育,史蒂文的情感和态度发生了巨大的、积极的变化。那么,我们在续写中就要着重体现角色的情感体验和发展。我们的想象力要从一个孩子在自我意识以及自我肯定的情感被激发后,能够产生的最大的积极能量出发来设计续写的情景。
3.续写的设计要注重传递积极的能量,宣扬正义的社会精神。本文的标题是 “Simple thanks”,其主旨是宣扬人的成长以及爱和教育的伟大,因此,我们在设计故事情节的时候,要特别关注角色的积极、健康的发展。
【案例导引】
阅读下面短文,根据所给情节进行续写,使之构成一个完整的故事。
Simple thanks
I have been in the teaching profession for more than thirty years, and one of the best teachers I have ever known was Mr Rowe. I was lucky enough to co?鄄teach with him for some years.
Mr Rowe had infinite patience and understanding and I learned so much from him. He could perform miracles, like the one he performed with Steven, one of the unhappiest kids I had ever seen. Steven couldnt stand school. He didnt like being picked last for kickball. He didnt like the kids who raised their hands and knew all the answers, and most importantly, he didnt like himself.
The first day he walked into Mr Rowes classroom, he ignored other students, look?鄄ing angry and annoyed, and slid into his chair, knocking a couple of textbooks onto the floor.
Mr Rowe walked over to him and touched Stevens shoulder, but Steven pulled away. Nevertheless, Mr Rowe welcomed him, “Hi, Steven. Im happy that you are in my class. We are going to have a great year.” Steven looked around the room as if Mr Rowe must be mistaken. No teacher in his right mind would want Steven to be part of his classroom.
So, while Mr Rowe seemed cheerful and relaxed that day of school, it seemed Steven was angry and confused.
That day after class, Mr Rowe chose Steven to pitch the kickball at recess. “Hey, Steven,” Mr Rowe commented. “You are good at pitching. Let me show you my secret trick.” Mr Rowe taught Steven one of the tricks that not a single kid could perform. Steven learned fast and did quite well! Everyone cheered for him!
After the kickball, Steven sat as close to Mr Rowe in class as he could. When a question was asked, Steven lit up; he knew the answer! He raised his hand. When he answered the question, his voice shook. However, he got the answer right! He said, with Mr Rowe, his days of the fourth grade promised to be wonderful.
That is not to say that every day went smoothly, but it was evident that Steven grew to love Mr Rowe more and more with each passing day.
注意:
1. 所续写短文的词数应为150左右;
2. 续写部分分为两段,每段的开头语已为你写好。
Time passed quickly that year, and before we all knew it, it was the last day of school.
Many years later, Mr Rowe and I were surprised when a handsome young man walked into the office.
一、原文中的人物角色
1. I: a teacher, the witness of the whole story
2. Mr Rowe: one of the main characters, the teacher who educated and changed Steven
3. Steven: one of the main characters, a student who was changed by Mr Rowe