What I Learned from Family1

Thereisnodoubtthatfamilyisthefirstschool of childrenwhere we have learned lotsof things. I havelearned perseverance frommymother.Let me share something about itwith you.

WhenIwasin Grade7，mymotherdecided to lose weight and I was weak in sports.So we planned torun together every morning. On the first day，I was full of energy at first. But then I felt so tired that Icouldn’t move anymore，which made mewanttogiveup.Butthenmymotherwalkedto me and said，“Nothing is impossible to a willing heart.”This gave me so much energy thatI could go on.Finally，with my efforts，not only did I improve mysports，butalsoIkepthealthy.

In short，Ilearned perseverance from my mother andIwill always rememberwhatmy mother said.Only when we stick to something can we do better.

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点评

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