生活与学习：丰富、充实、积极向上的生活

写作要求

丰富、充实且积极向上的生活，是一幅绚丽多彩的画卷，是心灵深处对美好事物不懈追求的体现。请你讲述自己在周末或假期的见闻、经历，或者对精彩生活的思考和感悟等。

要求：（1）词数80左右；（2）条理清晰，语句通顺，意义连贯，书写规范。

技法点拨

1.审题

（1）审文体：描述一次有意义的经历为叙述文，可通过具体的细节来展现积极的体验和感悟；介绍或表达对有意义的生活的安排，可为说明文。

（2）审主题：文章或明或暗地表达出这次经历如何丰富了自己的生活，或自己将通过何种方式构建一种丰富、充实且积极向上的生活。

（3）审人称和时态：使用第一人称“我”（I）或“我们”（we）来叙述，以增加文章的真实性和代入感。主要采用一般过去时来叙述自己在已发生的事中的所见所闻和所感；在表述个人生活的长期规律性的行为和习惯时，可使用一般现在时；在表述规划时可使用一般将来时。

2.列提纲

（1）首段：开门见山，直接点明主题或话题，可以是时间、地点、人物等要素的简述，或直接表达自己的观点和立场。

（2）中间段：具体描述见闻与经历，表达感受；或提出具体的建议并说明原因。

（3）尾段：总结感受，或提出观点和思考。

河南省郑州金水外国语学校

学生范文

A Trip to the Zoo

杜昊毅

Today， I went to the zoo because here came two new animals. Let’s go and have a look.

The first animal is a panda. Its name is Feifei. As we all know， panda is the treasure of China. It likes eating bamboo. It is really lovely and shy. It is only two years old.

The other animal is a lion. Its name is Karl. It is from Africa. Its favorite food is meat. And it looks very strong and dangerous. Karl is one year older than Feifei.

I love not only these two animals， but also all animals in the world. Let’s protect animals together.

河南省郑州丽水外国语学校

指导老师 任雨晨

点 评

文章要点齐全，结构合理，逻辑清晰。在此基础上，句型结构丰富，连接词使用得当。“panda is the treasure of China”这句话，不仅展示了作者丰富的词汇量和良好的表达能力，同时也点明了熊猫对于中国的独特意义，是本文的亮点。此外，作者通过使用“older than”比较级结构描写狮子的年龄，让文章的句型更加丰富。

My Wonderful Trip

时铭霞

Have you ever been to Anhui I have been there several times. It’s actually a beautiful province. I fell in love with it when I first travelled there.

I went to Anhui with my family last Autumn. It was cool and nice， with breeze blowing gently. There， we climbed Mount Huangshan and visited some ancient villages， which are famous scenic spots in Anhui and attract lots of visitors from all over the world every year. In addition， we also watched Huangmei opera， which is so unique that it has become a symbol of Anhui. Apart from that， we also enjoyed Maofeng tea. All of us loved it so much that we bought a lot.

All in all， this trip to Anhui has left me a deep impression that I’ll never forget.

河南省郑州龙门实验学校

指导老师 孙梦波

点 评

文章主要介绍了“我”和家人去年秋天去安徽的旅行经历，解释“我”喜欢安徽的原因，并在最后以“this trip to Anhui has left me…”一句进行总结，逻辑清晰，结构完整。在语言表达方面，作者能够灵活运用with复合结构、定语从句以及非限制性定语从句等表达，正确运用现在完成时描述已经发生的事情，值得肯定。

How to Spend a Meaningful Summer Vacation

樊安隅

The summer vacation is around the corner. How can we spend the vacation in a proper way The measures that I want to tell you are as follows.

First of all， on no account can we waste time on video games. Playing games can not only lead to health problems but also make our relationships with our family worse. We should keep on reading and doing exercise to keep our mind and body healthy. What’s more， we can be volunteers. Just as the saying goes， “The roses in her hands， the flavor in mine.” By helping others in need， we can get a strong feeling of satisfaction.

All in all， on no account can we ignore the importance of spending a meaningful summer vacation. What about you What are your suggestions

河南省郑州金桂中学

指导老师 辛会勤

点 评

文章结构清晰，开头直接点题，结尾部分以问句的形式引导读者思考，增加了互动性。使用表顺序的词，如“First of all”和“What’s more”，使文章逻辑清晰。使用倒装句“on no account can we…”增强了句子的表达力。文中给出了具体的建议，如避免沉迷于游戏、保持身心健康、参与志愿活动等，还使用了名言“The roses in her hands， the flavor in mine”（赠人玫瑰，手有余香）来支持参加志愿活动的建议，增加了文章的深度和说服力。